DAVE
There was this guy named Dave had a nice cut and a nice shave Bank account was large because he would save used to invest in real estate gotta a big house with a big maid this motherfucker was getting paid he’s fucking well-made he had two kids and a wife and a good marriage he was even friends with the sheriff I but at work that’s where he felt the most troubled that’s where his brain would always gets jumbled and his ego slowly started to crumble every conversation with his boss felt like a fumble no matter what he does more work keeps gettin shoveled and the attitude he got gets doubled But then he comes home has to put on a completely different face he can’t show the pain and a disgrace that he feels from being undermined and constantly thrown to the side even though he’s still trying to ride I know that shit must’ve destroyed his pride for all the shit that he did for them bitches because they would leave that motherfucker in the ditches but then all of a sudden this light switches on he goes and picks up the bottle of Jack started drinking that shit until he threw up and had fucking yak Fell on his back but the next day gets a call it’s his boss telling him we don’t need you no more your gone he’s trying to argue with him so we can keep his job that motherfucker hung up Dave said OK it’s on so it goes up in the fucking closet starts pour out some guns and stuff and ammo in his pockets he loaded the guns then locked it drove that motherfucking job like rocket he gets out and immediately starts Poppin walks in the lobby turn it bodies to salami even killing his own fucking homies goes to his bosses office that’s on the ninth floor shoots him nine times and then shoots him nine more I guess he was goin for a high score The police are starting to swarm and mentally his brain is completely fucking torn he don’t know what to do so he started pacing around the room started to scream and shout tell his brain to tell the demons to get the fuck out asking God what the fuck do I do now put the gun in his mouth and blew his brains out peace out Dave
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There was this guy named Dave had a nice cut and a nice shave Bank account was large because he would save used to invest in real estate gotta a big house with a big maid this motherfucker was getting paid he’s fucking well-made he had two kids and a wife and a good marriage he was even friends with the sheriff I but at work that’s where he felt the most troubled that’s where his brain would always gets jumbled and his ego slowly started to crumble every conversation with his boss felt like a fumble no matter what he does more work keeps gettin shoveled and the attitude he got gets doubled But then he comes home has to put on a completely different face he can’t show the pain and a disgrace that he feels from being undermined and constantly thrown to the side even though he’s still trying to ride I know that shit must’ve destroyed his pride for all the shit that he did for them bitches because they would leave that motherfucker in the ditches but then all of a sudden this light switches on he goes and picks up the bottle of Jack started drinking that shit until he threw up and had fucking yak Fell on his back but the next day gets a call it’s his boss telling him we don’t need you no more your gone he’s trying to argue with him so we can keep his job that motherfucker hung up Dave said OK it’s on so it goes up in the fucking closet starts pour out some guns and stuff and ammo in his pockets he loaded the guns then locked it drove that motherfucking job like rocket he gets out and immediately starts Poppin walks in the lobby turn it bodies to salami even killing his own fucking homies goes to his bosses office that’s on the ninth floor shoots him nine times and then shoots him nine more I guess he was goin for a high score The police are starting to swarm and mentally his brain is completely fucking torn he don’t know what to do so he started pacing around the room started to scream and shout tell his brain to tell the demons to get the fuck out asking God what the fuck do I do now put the gun in his mouth and blew his brains out peace out Dave
Here are my scores: Bars: 9/10 Delivery: 9/10 Impression: 9/10 Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥
What's up @youngrip301, Thanks for the submission, let's have a look at 'DAVE'! 💥 Using headphones will cut out the feedback and really help the quality. 🎧 Smooth delivery here, keep it up! 🎶 The beat is fire, nice choice. 🎼 Why don't you try some autotune or reverb to really enhance your track? The storytelling in this track is so vivid! You're a few tweaks away from being very good! Keep putting the work in and you'll get there! We can't wait to hear what else you got in store! All the best, The Rap Fame Team 😎
Here are my scores: Bars: 9/10 Delivery: 8/10 Impression: 9/10 Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Great 🎉 Impression: Dope 🔥
Here are my scores: Bars: 9/10 Delivery: 9/10 Impression: 9/10 Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥
Here are my scores: Bars: 10/10 Delivery: 10/10 Impression: 10/10 Bars: Perfect 💯 Delivery: Perfect 💯 Impression: Perfect 💯
Here are my scores: Bars: 10/10 Delivery: 10/10 Impression: 10/10 Bars: Perfect 💯 Delivery: Perfect 💯 Impression: Perfect 💯
Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥
Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥
Bro, you crushed it! Delivering heat as always! 🔥 Bars: Dope 🔥 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥
Bars: Great 🎉 Delivery: Dope 🔥 Impression: Dope 🔥