Rap Fame A&R

3 years ago

Hi there @addierocks, Here's some feedback on your track '1st Punic war', thank you for sharing with us! 💥 Your bars need work, try write lyrics that are meaningful to you. Improve your flow by listening to your favourite artists and paying attention to the flow patterns they use! You're off beat on this, try and pay a little more attention to when your bars land on the track. This beat is working well for you! 🎼 We think you've got something, you just need a bit more work to make something great! 👌 We loved listening to your music, please share with us again! 💪 All the best, The Rap Fame Team 😎

addierocks

3 years ago

Wanna hear a rap? A rap about the 1st Punic War? Alright let’s go. A time when Carthage wanted Sicily. But so did Italy. They went to battle But Carthage didn’t tattle. This ended up, as you see it. With victory coming, to Italyyyy. Yoo. - Anna Rome came out on top. They never stoped. They took control of the Mediterranean Sea But no one was glee they didn’t feel set free But that was only the binging of the Punic wars assuming for, 2 yet to come.