(Updated)my 1st beat with song

alittle updated version of my first song on a beat I made. still far from finished tho. need feedback my dudes #feedbakk1 ---------------------------------------------------------- @bmvideo #GETFRESH #BMFEATURES #2021 🔥🔥💯💯💯👀👀#RESPECT #SC_HIPHOP #MBSC #MBMUSIC #CAROLINAMUSIC #ETHER #RAPFAME #FREESTYLE #FLY #FEATUREME #FEATUREMATERIAL #LOCOENT #DGC #1 #BMBEST #BMVIDEO #REALASSMUSIC #REALRAP #HIPHOP #NOCAPRAP  #BM2020 #2020HEAT #2020EXTERMINATION #BMHEAT @2rue6lue @GunPowdeR @shagsavage @MICLofaro @ceeron777 @FlowFeSSionaL @HOODBORN_THADON @candicebowman @kingmukaitai @JohnJartu @poeticmeech @rockydagreat @josh191 @Fre3Spir1t @one_hobby @Eligma @atm_entertainment @teflon_formally_dbt @boogie62uce @1085va @LEEDER @MRPROPER @YoungIntell @Cjthepoet  @dd3_01  @Sebsonrec  @mc_shottaflow  @THEETC  @gregoryjohn  @littleskittle28  @UltraT  @Mr.ToppBreed.  @MikeMike.16  @PaulSmith2420 @BakiBelleMadubung  @ChrisTurriettaRector  @TjJohnson.3  @rodrees  @christo0phercoke  @yasmi  @vbddvdmdld  @seandapaul  @233232  @chukay   @punches  @LailaMichele  @sorrypart3  @DuriqSki  @b.t.m  @kingrio_84  @gwapamillie  @kingrio_84#3BGFOREVER #3BGNATION #3BGTHAMALICIOUS #3BGTHAUNION #DUMPSTERDUCK #3BG #3BGLUV #3BG4LIFE #MHG #MHG4LIFE #MHGLUV @bellybelz53 #GENOBELZ #SPAINTRAIN @spaintrain @green3bg #GREEN3BG @Ether6600 #ETHER6600 #ETHER6600 #1085VA #COSTRANOTRA #BMFEATURES #2020HEAT #RESPECT #SC_HIPHOP #VA #RAPFAME #FREESTYLE #FLY #FEATUREME #FEATUREMATERIAL #1 #BMBEST #BMVIDEO #REALASSMUSIC #REALRAP #HIPHOP #NOCAPRAP #BM2020 #2020HEAT #2020EXTERMINATION #BMHEAT #3BG #3BGLUV #3BG4LIFE #MHG #MHG4LIFE #MHGLUV #BMGRIND #VIBE #LOVE #RAPPER #BANGER #BARS #FEARURE #HEAT #HOT #FIRE #MUSIC #UNDERGROUND #2020NEWS #BEATS #LIBERIANJ #MRDECEMBER #7THSAM #KINGOFGUNHILL #GWIZ @Ether6600 @1085va @7thsam @dastir @kingofgunhill @ozsum @liberia @MR.DECEMBER @green3bg @pefferydadon @bmvideo @bmtv @moderator_en @goddessofangels@kingofgunhill @smoov23smoovass @king.j.the.lyricist @Eligma @bellybelz53 @kellaTides @bosdyboo @josh191 @Morleymusic @BGEGriff @mrcutt @libearian @cincitywaybackwhen @dub_b @GunPowder @spaintrain @flexi @wild100s @Reggiedelafonta @MikelLove.1 @D_GoD @DatsRidgeSide @Accent @OmarMukhtar @stohnestohne @NinoSnow @rockydagreat @BigYo86 @fre3spir1t @EricChasinCheckz @boogie62uce @vigilantyflawda @assassinjas @candicebowman @teflon1085REVIEW #3BG #3BGNATION #3BGTHAUNION #3BGFOREVER #GUNHILL #3BGGREEN #1085VA #KINGSPADE3 #LIVEQUAN #DONTFALLASLEEP @GunPoWdeR @iambabyquan @killacalilyricist95 @elpinchekon @vigilantyflawda @kingofgunhill @green.b @Ether6600 @ozsum @BGEGriff @smoov23smoov @BigYo86 @liberia @rockydagreat @Fre3spir1t @EricChasinCheckz @spaintrain @cassandralately @Mr.December #CAPTAINNOHOES @cincitywaybackwhen @bellybelz53 @teflon_formally_dbt @josh191 @ITSJLEEBITCH @goddesofangels @boogie62uce @stohnestohne @Accent @candicebowman @assassinjaa @pefferydadon @NinoSnow @OmarMukhtar @Xenshin @mikellove.1 @DatsRidgeSide @D_GOD @Reggiedelafonta @Eligma @wild100s @Trpl3Lf @mrcutt @underated187 @JVee @Dagodlyone1 @Provident @STRIK3R @GarrinYates @ogb3 @countryroad80 @king.j.the.lyricist @grimwisdom @theheretic @astrxgxd @cjchop @lil_cashie_uzi @gtech @kbe.starr @dabarr @mg213mg @moderator_en @m.o @GOBARZ @JIMIJAUDIO... @ladylouise @wackdaddy @cmlidz7dte @Sevenflame @cyl3ntz @anonymous.j @SamDawg @arrows @itsjaxx @mulahbleu @A_DAPT_BDI.CREW520 @renebisson.6675 @mulahbleu @kemetbosfied @tyd0l14s @garethjackson @speedythieves @nastynate316 @rayonpurge @starvingmusician @oye_the_gr8 @realstretch @SWANNY @garethjackson @deathnote.6497 @hashtagimblazed @smokewithme @godsent4518 @lil_vibez24 @timmarrotte @godsent4518 @allsidemenfreaks @dingue.5377 @hashtagimblazed @arnoldbradley @makolafortune @thy_god @taydavip @dreadheadr.e.d. @gontsemnisi @dingue.5377 @nassah_313 @yungquan28 @rayonpurge @kybabey @hiddenreality @shaunnovakcaspadaghost @nastynate316 @barakosoul @joelroy @youkyone @lildlilkat @umaster @youkyone @moderator_en @rapfametv @rapfamefeatured #RISEUPfreestyle ---------------------------------------------------------- @EEMCEE